Sweet Volcano

Have you ever seen a fizzy drink volcano? Well I have and I'm going to tell you how it erupts when you put mentos in.

In a fizzy drink there is CO2 (carbon dioxide). That's how bubbles are formed when CO2 gets covered by H2O (water). So when you put mentos in the fizzy it brakes the H2O and the CO2 escapes and multiplies before it flows over the sides.

So now you know what happens when you mentos in a fizzy drink try it for yourself.

Character Description

Ice princess icicle.

Her voice sounds like it is croaky because she has shouted to much. Her ice castle is a cold dark gloomy place if you go near you will feel cold and lonely just like her. Sitting on a throne wearing a snowy white dress in her hair like a bird's nest sits a beautiful sparkly icicle crown. She never stops turning little children into stone. We hear a crash as the statues fall. Her crystal clear dress has creases that look like droopy cobwebs crawling down her dress.

Evidence of achieving my writing goals

My writing goals are to use a range of language features in my writing such as personification, and alliteration etc.

This shows that I used personification to describe Hotumauea shivering.

To use apostrophes accurately.

This shows that I know where apostrophes go. Because a letter is missing or to show that someone owns it.


My final goal is to edit my own writing looking for ways to improve it further.

100WC changes to our golf tournament story

Thanks to the teachers who have commented. We were able to improve our writing using your comments. Check out our new improved version.

It was the day of the golf tournament. I shot through the door as fast as lightning. Mum asked why I was in such a hurry. I looked back but didn’t say a thing. I reached the golf factory and dashed through the design room.

That’s when it all happened...

 I twisted the door handle to the production room. Creeeaak! My ears were hit by a horrible sizzling noise. Next thing I heard … was the ping pong of all the golf balls flying across the room! One hit a shiny red button. But instead of stopping, the chaos still went on.

 

Can you please leave a comment about what you liked about our changes. Our changes are in red.

My 100WC shows that I am editing my work using the feedback I get from my readers.

Who Am I Poem?

                                                        The long wooden life

I  stand  whimpering

Watching  the  kids  having fun,

I  stand  all  night  long

Till  morning  I  watch  the  sun,

I  jumped  the  Waikato  River

Away  from  my  enemies,

When  it’s  winter  I  shiver

All  down  my  wooden  body,

I  am  a  legend

For  many  many  people,

I  will  mend

The  children’s  memories  with  love,

Who  am  I?

-By Gina

Please leave me a comment about who this is.

Writing with description

WALT:  add description in our writing.

The ______ lady walked across the _____ field.
    
       Angry         stormed                enormous
      old               strolled                 shaking
       fat               strided                  big
       happy         stomped                green
       wrinkilled      
       upset
       scared
       jolly
       nice
       kind
       horrible
       unhonest
       younge
       honest
       sencible
       bad tempered

The angry lady stormed across the green field.

Procedure Writing

The other day we did a procedure on how to make an Origami whale. My instructions were clear but it did not turn out right because there was a point at the top. Next time I will make my instructions clearer.