100WC-And then I saw a bright light

I lay there unconscious from the knock that had occurred a few minutes ago. After a few more minutes I had recovered so I struggled to my feet. I felt myself trembling. Opening my mouth I called “help!” Nobody came so I tried again. I waited and then I saw a bright light from a lantern. I was panic stricken would this person save me or was it my enemy who had given me that blow at first. I pursed my lips as I saw my enemy coming near. Without thinking I ran at him and thumped him as hard as I could.

Character Description

Ice princess icicle.

Her voice sounds like it is croaky because she has shouted to much. Her ice castle is a cold dark gloomy place if you go near you will feel cold and lonely just like her. Sitting on a throne wearing a snowy white dress in her hair like a bird's nest sits a beautiful sparkly icicle crown. She never stops turning little children into stone. We hear a crash as the statues fall. Her crystal clear dress has creases that look like droopy cobwebs crawling down her dress.

100WC-Suddenly I heard a crack

As I opened the gate the moonlight shone on my bare feet. The brown autumn tan glittered like the sea at night. I made my way to the front porch hardly making a sound. Twisting the door knob I entered the house. It seemed abandoned. Quickly and quietly I pulled the door shut behind me. As I continued my search I journeyed past different rooms, as I crossed one room, out of the corner of my eye, I spied a row of shiny treasure chests. I tip toed into the room and suddenly I heard a crack I jumped behind a chest. I was the witches prisoner.  

100WC-As the train entered the tunnel

Once upon a time in faraway land there was a bridge no-one was allowed to cross like the troll and the three goats. No one even dared put a foot on it otherwise BANG... a gun would be fired headshot. Now as the years went past a plan was decided by the men that lived there. One day their plan was successful.  They started shovelling a large tunnel in the ground. As the train entered the tunnel for the workers to get on with finishing the tunnel, a lava flow came trickling through and everyone died. The men were never forgotten for their bravery and exhausting work.

Evidence of achieving my writing goals

My writing goals are to use a range of language features in my writing such as personification, and alliteration etc.

This shows that I used personification to describe Hotumauea shivering.

To use apostrophes accurately.

This shows that I know where apostrophes go. Because a letter is missing or to show that someone owns it.


My final goal is to edit my own writing looking for ways to improve it further.

100WC changes to our golf tournament story

Thanks to the teachers who have commented. We were able to improve our writing using your comments. Check out our new improved version.

It was the day of the golf tournament. I shot through the door as fast as lightning. Mum asked why I was in such a hurry. I looked back but didn’t say a thing. I reached the golf factory and dashed through the design room.

That’s when it all happened...

 I twisted the door handle to the production room. Creeeaak! My ears were hit by a horrible sizzling noise. Next thing I heard … was the ping pong of all the golf balls flying across the room! One hit a shiny red button. But instead of stopping, the chaos still went on.

 

Can you please leave a comment about what you liked about our changes. Our changes are in red.

My 100WC shows that I am editing my work using the feedback I get from my readers.

Evidence of achieving my maths goal

My maths goals are to have a quick recall of my 2-10 times tables.

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Another goal is to start working with decimals and percentage's.

My last maths goal confidently follow the directions of a map.

Evidence of achieving my reading goals.

                                                

These pictures show that I have been answering questions that my group ask and sharing my own questions about the stories we read.

My other reading goal is to continue extending my vocabulary knowledge.
These pictures show that I have extended my vocabulary knowledge but I have to keep on working on this all the time to learn new words.